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Review:Dellacqua says:
That was amazing! I really can't tell you how much I enjoyed that chapter. (This is Dellacqua from the Forums by the way - I should have introduced myself first really).

Anyway I think this was a fantastic idea for a chapter, I enjoyed so much the insight at the beginning into the Black family. In any Marauder era fanfics theres a tendency to focus on Sirius hating his family so it has been so interesting to have that pre-moving out of the Black family scene to show what it was really like for Sirius beforehand.

I think all the members of the Black family you included were completely perfect in their characterisation and it was really intriguing to see Sirius' mother when she doted on Sirius because he was the heir to the Black fortune.

As if the story wasn't already good enough the first meetings he had with James were brilliant and fitted exactly with both the childish instincts they both would have had as well as the influence of their families.

"James shrugged casually. “Perhaps if I can make friends with you before you’re released to the Slytherins, maybe I can save the rest of the school. Maybe, if I were to make your horrible future known to you, you’ll decide not to act that way. If I can show you how ridiculous it is, I mean.” James looked curiously at him, and then added, “Maybe I can save you from being like them.”" I thought that was fantastic, a really amazing bit of writing. It so beautifully foreshadows everything that we know will come later and shows through the naivety of a child the real reality of a situation. James no doubt means it all so innocently but it is what changes Sirius' opinion and ultimately makes them friends and there was just something about those few lines which especially struck me.

This was such an interesting way of enveloping that scene on the train which we knew from the HP books and I especially liked your ending, it was absolutely perfect and seemed to in-keeping with the relationship between the two boys.

Absolutely brilliant stuff, can't wait to read on!

Author's Response: Hehe, I know who you are! *cheer* Well, I am really glad that you enjoyed this. It's always made me a little on the fence, because there's SO many Marauder stories like this, and they meet on the train, etc.

I really don't think that Sirius hated his family at such a young age! I don't think he even hated them when he ran away from home years later. I think he might claim to to cover it up. I'm glad you liked the Blacks' characterisations (they're a lot of fun to write - I thoroughy enjoy Sirius's homelife for some reason). I think the whole family doted on Sirius for being the heir! He had it good.

I'm so happy you liked James's conversation with Sirius - I've always been worried it was a little out of place and not really the sort of thing that an eleven year old would say. And at the same time, I think James is "different," and I think he could see right through Sirius. For some reason, I think they understood each other really well right off the bat, even if Sirius fought it, and I think that's why they were such fantastic friends.

I hate having to paraphrase what J.K.R. writes, but I was happy to do so in this chapter, for I kind of hated the way she had Sirius say "Maybe I'll break the tradition" or something similar (in regards to his whole family being in Slytherin). I don't know why I hate the idea of him already turning on his family, but I was glad to make some changes and I'm pleased you liked it as well.

Thank you for the wonderful review, I wasn't expecting such a great one when I requested! And I'm sorry it has taken me a full day to respond. I check for new reviews every day, and for some reason, it didn't dawn on me that my review count had changed.


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