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Review:Dellacqua says:
Its a shame the chapter is so short but I can understand that you just needed it as a filler so it didn't jumped about too much time wise.

Anyway, grammar-wise it's near perfect so no worries about that, there was jsut a sentence: "Albus interjected, fear lining clearly in his voice" which doesn't make too much sense but I think it's just a slip and you meant to put a different word. At any rate it's hardly noticeable!

I liked this chapter and how much Albus and Scorpius told each other to "sod off" - great times! I think it just developed how much the reader knows about their re-existing relationship and also gave you a chance to show some more of their individual character.

I like Scorpius' "I'm a Malfoy and I don't care about anyone else" attitude and that obviously there is already some feelings there for Rose surely, otherwise why else would he be so keen to talk to her whenever he saw her?

Great build up and characterisation of some of the key characters, I especially liked the appearance of McGonagall - scary as ever!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I really appreciate it :D

Yeah, I think my beta caught that, so in the revised version, all should be well (:

EEEP.
I've never gotten so many compliments on characterization, I'm so glad I'm doing well with it (: I'm really getting attached to this story *dies*

I'm also glad you liked McGonagall, I just had to write her SOMEWHERE xD

Thanks for the superbulous review~~

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