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Review:PenguinsWillReignSupreme says:
Aha! Quickest review in history...perhaps :P

First things, I love your characterisation. You've brought Bella and Narcissa's attitudes off brilliantly here. The relationship between them is fantastic, and reminiscent of the conversations we see in both the Half-Blood Prince and Deathly Hallows.

I loved the opening few paragraphs. It made me want to be in Paris (I adore that city) and you seemed to sum up the Black family's values and Narcissa's take on them excellently.

The last paragraph too was very good. I've just read over something of my own where I wrote about someone 'storming' - what a word :P

So yes, in spite of my lack of other reading about the Black sisters, I think you've got a good story on your hands. The dialogue/description balance with this is much better than MWM (though I still love it to bits!), and I enjoyed reading it a lot.
My one criticism? You and your commas! -sigh- It wasn't too difficult to read without them but it made the odd sentence sound odd.

Besides that, I really enjoyed it - wonderful :)

Rachelle
xx

Author's Response: Very fast! Possibly not the quickest response though =P. Sorry about that!

It means a lot that you think that their relationship is believable and also canon. I don't tend to follow canon a lot, but when I do I'm always very worried about getting it wrong. Thank you loads ^_^.

Me too! I love it and it was seeing the Eiffel Tower in the banner in UFG that inspired me to have her there. I have a feeling that Narcissa may return in the future just so that I can write about it. I also like the fact that it let me contrast Narcissa's behaviour with other girls her age. I mean, this only takes place in the seventies, but in my mind Pureblood attitudes are always a bit behind the time.

Storming is a great word and one that seems to apply to Bella very well. I can imagine her storming everywhere, Lol.

Yes, I've got to agree that this fic has a much better balance, which is exactly what I needed. And if I manage to convert you into a Black sisters lover during the course of this, it'll all be worthwhile! I know, Rachelle loff... I'm a disaster with commas! But I shall be getting myself a beta and all will be right with the world. Also, was it just me or did you spot Hot French Man from the balcony? =P

Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review! I hope that you'll continue to enjoy it ^_^.
Jane xx

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