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Review:Bella_Portia says:
I could have sworn I reviewed this. Perhaps I just intended to.

I always liked this story and continue to hope you will pick it up.

I like the elaborate, well-thought-out, detailed way you describe the Potter house and its wards and magical aspects. When people are shunted into the Apparation Chamber, I picture something like a garage (with all the garden tools in the same location).

I love your take on Rolf. The combination of a Viking/shaman/ wild man and cultured scholar just seems absolutely right. It also describes someone who is the right kind of "thoroughly eccentric" to be a good match for Luna.

The line about, if we didn't give Draco a second chance, what would have become of Rose -- I did not get that. Does it tie into something that came up in one of the earlier chapters?

The intereactions between all the characters -- you have eight of them going on -- are just extremely natural and believable.

I look forward to reading more of this.

Author's Response: I think you did review this long ago and it got eaten by the server crash that ate so many reviews. I am working on the next chapter and I'm posting at my livejournal account as I re-write it, both as a writing circle exercise and as a way for me to show my (slow) process.

I really want to get back to this, as I know exactly how this story goes and plays out, until the ending. Usually I don't know exactly how the stories going to end when I free-write, but this one I can so clearly picture in my mind.

I'm so glad that you like the little details; that's something that's important for me and since Harry and Hermione were both raised by Muggles some things that are familiar to use would be familiar to them too, like security systems.

Ah, Rolf. His physical appearance is based on a friend of mine, with a bit wilder appearance than my friend. I love the dichotomy between his appearance and his mental acuity. I don't know if I'm going to actually use a bit of dialogue I wrote for him or not, but it goes, "What's the point of being a wizard if you can't be a bit eccentric?" I think that sums up him, Luna and their relationship.

The line about Draco is a plot bunny that I would like to incorporate into this story as a flashback, but might write as a one-shot. It will center around an interaction between Harry and Draco and Draco doing something not exactly heroic, but at least not cowardly.

I knew these chapters with the dinner would be hard with eight characters, but I never thought the flashback sequences would be what tripped me up.

I'm so glad you came back and re-reviewed this; your opinion means a lot to me.


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