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Review:Jessi_Rose says:
Evelyn, my goodness! I am in love with this story!

I have to admit that the amount of times that I actually come back and read by request of a reviewer is minimal. It's nothing personal, of course, just that I don't have much time to breathe. That having been said, I decided to come check out No Air because I'm looking for a good WIP to help keep me just distracted enough. (ADD is a wonderful thing sometimes =P). I also typically don't read stories on HPFF that have OCs. You probably understand my hesitation: a lot of authors tend to reuse and recycle other characters or create Mary Sues. So, imagine my shock when I started reading your story... and couldn't stop!

I'm awful for not leaving a review a chapter, but I hope you understand that I decided to save all of my thoughts for the very end. I even made some rather illegible notes =P They're supposed to mean something, I think... but after the last two chapters, I completely forgot why I wrote down what I did at the beginning. Go figure.

Valora is a great character and her interaction with the others is wonderful. You avoided most of the OC cliches that haunt most authors... and even the ones that were there (ie: Valora being a 'Marauder') are simply unavoidable based on characteristics of everyone else. Valora is a strong, poignant vessel for your plot. A reader can connect to her, which is probably the most important aspect of a story. If you have a character with which no one can relate, you have a story with detached feeling. Not a problem for you, my dear. Your Valora is very human indeed.

Snape. Chapter 13 and Snape. You know what I'm talking about, don't you? How perfectly Snape was he, most especially at the beginning of that chapter! I have to admit that I'm partial to that entire chapter (apart from the well written love scene!) because of the quote you used in the chapter note. That is one of my all-time favorite songs. :) I actually listened to it through that chapter yesterday and it did make it all the more emotional. Not in a sad way, just in a ... *sigh* kind of way, you know what I mean? I tend to be a bit confusing; for an author, I have a hard time stringing words together in a comprehensive way. =P

The last four chapters... I couldn't breathe, to put it mildly. I was reading and trying to determine how I felt about the story as a whole as I was being sucked into Valora's conundrums and emotions. I fell in love with her character, more than even Sirius - who is my favorite (which I think you know =P)

So, to put it shortly (haha, after that long ramble), I absolutely adore this story and will be reading the rest of the sequel over the coming weeks. Thanks for pointing me in this direction - and for an intoxicating story!



Author's Response: I think you get an award for my longest review ever but I enjoyed every minute of it! I don't mind one bit that you didn't leave a review for every chapter because just the knowledge that you take the time to read it is enough for me. I'm so happy Valora works for you as a character. Does it sound silly to say I'm shocked? Honestly, I got to know her as I wrote her, which is weird. Normally I already have in my head what I expect my character's personality to be but she surprises me so often.

I ADORE the band Live and had just become a fan around the time I started this series. Most of the titles are lyrics and I rely heavily on music to influence my writing. The playlist I use while writing has 256 songs. =) Ironic how the last four chapters of 'No Air' made you breathless...haha...sorry, bad joke.

Thank you so much for reading and I hope you enjoy A Broken Promise and the rest of the series. Keep up your amazing R&R!

Evelyn Grey

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