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Review:xxSTARxx says:
I've spent the best part of today reading this. At times your spelling wasn't the best, but I still think it was a great story!!

Loved the bit earlier when Harry and Ginny were broke into on christmas eve and Ginny asked what it was and Harry said Santa!! LOL!!! Laughed ages at that!!

I was actually in tears when Ron was "killed", you wrote that scene beautifully!!

However, I do feel that you need to work their ages out better. Erin was 4 when Reynolds was born and so six years later would make her 10 (possibly nearly 11), Reynolds would be 6 and you said Madelyn was 3. Then you said 12 years later, Erin was 22, but she started Hogwarts at 11 and 11+12 =23 not 22! Also, you said madelyn would be 14, but this is impossible as she was 3 when Erin was 11, so 3+12 = 15, not 14! However, I suppose she could have been about to have her 15th birthday? Hmm, never mind, ignore me! It's late, Lol!


Anyway, overall a great story, thought it skipped a bit too much at the end though, should have said if she actually became a Gryffindor or not, and also some adventures she had at Hogwarts. I think it would have helped a lot if you included a description of what her husband looked like though.

But, on the whole, great story!! Well Done!!

100/10!!

Author's Response: yeah, i wrote this mainly when i was in 8th grade, so i spelling and stuff is sketchy. haha. erin was 5 when he was born and 12 years later if erin would have had her birthday, she'd be 22, and the same for madelyn. however, i also could have messed up. haha. thanks so much. i'm really glad that you liked it, overall. :]

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