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Review:TwilightPrincess says:
Little did I know at that time, however, was that my life was about to turn upside-down. First of all, this sentence doesn't make sense. If you took out the 'was' it would be good. This wasn't the only mistake in grammar. Perhaps consider getting a beta to check over your work so that it's all squeaky clean. Secondly, this is a cliche alert. The whole 'little did I know my life would change forever' is horribly overused and these types of sentences should generally be avoided in all writing.

I really like this story. It's a unique look at Malfoy, that's for sure. Not many people would paint him as the hero, and it's interesting to see that side of him; whether or not that side exists in canon is a moot point. This story is really cool.

As for characterizations, I felt that Alison was a little on the flat side. I felt like there wasn't enough to her to make me really feel for her, much less understand what she was feeling. Your Draco was pretty good, though. Although I can't see him being the hero in anyone's case, I won't drone on about that because without him saving her, you'd have no story =P

As for the summary, I don't particularly care for it. There's certainly nothing wrong with it, but it's nothing to set the world on fire. Try using some lines directly from your story as a summary. Something strong that pops out at readers. Don't hold back.

Overall, this was a very good story. I really liked it. Ganbare! Tanoshinde ^_^

.:.Ilia.:.

Author's Response: Thank you! So much!

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