Report a Review

This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:TwilightPrincess says:
Little did I know at that time, however, was that my life was about to turn upside-down. First of all, this sentence doesn't make sense. If you took out the 'was' it would be good. This wasn't the only mistake in grammar. Perhaps consider getting a beta to check over your work so that it's all squeaky clean. Secondly, this is a cliche alert. The whole 'little did I know my life would change forever' is horribly overused and these types of sentences should generally be avoided in all writing.

I really like this story. It's a unique look at Malfoy, that's for sure. Not many people would paint him as the hero, and it's interesting to see that side of him; whether or not that side exists in canon is a moot point. This story is really cool.

As for characterizations, I felt that Alison was a little on the flat side. I felt like there wasn't enough to her to make me really feel for her, much less understand what she was feeling. Your Draco was pretty good, though. Although I can't see him being the hero in anyone's case, I won't drone on about that because without him saving her, you'd have no story =P

As for the summary, I don't particularly care for it. There's certainly nothing wrong with it, but it's nothing to set the world on fire. Try using some lines directly from your story as a summary. Something strong that pops out at readers. Don't hold back.

Overall, this was a very good story. I really liked it. Ganbare! Tanoshinde ^_^

.:.Ilia.:.

Author's Response: Thank you! So much!

Your Name:
Reason for this Report:

Examples:
  • The review is offensive.
  • The review is spam or chit-chat (not actually a review).
  • The review was double posted.
  • The review has formatting problems.
Submit Report:  





All stories remain the property of their authors and must not be copied in any form without their consent. This is an unofficial, not for profit site, and is in no way connected with J.K. Rowling, Scholastic Books or Bloomsbury Publishing or Warner Bros. It is not endorsed by any of the aforementioned parties. Rights to characters and their images is neither claimed nor implied. The use of photographs and/or the likeness of any person contained herein does not imply endorsement of any kind. Any depictions were obtained through publically available sources and therefore fall under fair use. Although we may provide links to other websites, we are not responsible for any material at these sites. You acknowledge that you link to these other websites at your own risk. All original administrative content is copyright of the site owner and must not be copied in any form (electronic or otherwise) without the prior consent of the siteowner. ©2000-2012 Fanfictionworld.net

[terms of service] [report abuse] [privacy policy] [site credits]
 
 

navigation

home

search HPFF
read stories
write stories
login/register
get help
site links
forums
podcasts
Terms of Service
Site Rules
contact us

  
 
 

categories & genres

Genre:
- crossover
- drama
- fluff
- general
- horror/dark
- humor
- mystery
- romance
- action/adventure
- angst
- au
- young adult

Popular Pairings:
- harry/ginny
- ron/hermione
- james/lily
- draco/hermione
- more...

Format:
- one-shot
- short story
- novella
- novel
- short story collection
- songfic

  
 
 

quick links

my account
ToS
random story
site rules
help
merchandise


  
 
 

fanfictionworld.net