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Review:TwilightPrincess says:
I was going to talk about the first scene first, but after I read the next one, I had to do that one immediately. How impressive! I don't even know how to explain it. The way you wrote the scene where she asks him if he still loves her... pure genius. I could just FEEL everything happening, it was so good. And when she said that she had to ask him something, I could see her face, serious, and you had the perfect amount of narration between what she said and his response. His response was, by the way, brilliant. I could see him perfectly as well. When she finally asked him if he still loved her, I was shocked. My eyes bulged at the screen, honestly. You caught me by surprise for sure, which is something I admire in writing. That whole exchange was just... wow. I don't even... wow.

Forgive me for gushing. Back to the opening scene. I like the line you chose for the first line of the chapter. It really set the scene without being obnoxious. It was simple but very effective, which really is how all your writing is. The scene was beautifully written and it really added a lot to the story. A great insertion. Good placement, too.

Overall, this chapter was awesome. As I said, your writing is very impressive.

Ganbare! Tanoshinde ^_^


Author's Response: Wow, thanks! This chapter was definitely the most difficult by far. I took forever to write it because I had to get into the mood, or else it didn't sound right. I liked the "question" part, too, because it was fun to make Rab sweat. ;) Writing the back-and-forth shifting of power between them was a great experience.

I'm glad you liked the battle scene. I stuck it in because I felt we needed a brief break before the heavy second part. There's some foreshadowing in there, too. Thank you for your wonderful reviews, and I'm so happy you enjoyed it! =]


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