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Review:TwilightPrincess says:
I cannot praise your writing style enough. I absolutely adore it. Reading this is no different than reading poetry. And I know I've said that before but there really is no other way to describe your beautiful prose. Never mind Bellatrix Lestrange's wayward words, Alanna was sure that Rabastan loved her. Even to contemplate such a betrayal of their bond was insanity.

I have to tell you. When you were in the flashback and Alanna said, "Really?" and Rabastan came back with, "No, not really." I lol'd. It's been my personal goal to do that to someone, and seeing it in writing reignited that desire in me. It's a little cruel, but it's more funny than mean. I'm going to have to do that soon. XD

I like the way you write Alanna's dialogue more than anyone else's. Something about her seems more approachable, more... natural. Perhaps you did this on purpose, but Rabastan in comparison to Alanna seems like he's from a different world, where they talk all proper and such. If you did that purposely, kudos to you because that's brilliant. But if you didn't, might I suggest adding a little of the friendliness from Alanna to Rab's characterization.

Another excellent chapter. I expected nothing less.

Ganbare! Tanoshinde ^_^


Author's Response: Haha, it's funny that you compare this to poetry because I always feel like I'm making everything too melodramatic to be believable. Alanna has plenty of emotional problems, of course, but I tone each chapter down a couple notches before I post. Writing poetically seems like a good balance. ;)

And go for it, I'm sure it'll be hilarious. =]

Yeah, I totally know what you mean about Rab speaking differently. Like I said, Rabastan speaks the way he is: cold and aloof [at least for now]. He isn't approachable, and certainly almost everything about him is false to a degree. There's also his pureblood upbringing to consider, whereas Alanna was raised relatively coarsely. She isn't too approachable to outsiders, but to Rabastan she always makes the effort to connect with him. I didn't think much about their language - I guess it just came along with their characters.

Thank you so much for the reviews. I appreciate them! =]

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