Report a Review

This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:redherring says:
Hey, here with your review :)

I liked this, actually. It was mysterious, sexy, dramatic... but even so, it felt a little too inconclusive to me. I'm just left wanting to know more, which in a way, I suppose, is a good thing, but whatever :P

I just feel it needs a bit more... explanation. Why exactly did she kill him? Just what happened that turned Rose Weasley into a murderer? In the whole 'You left me to die' conversation, you touched on the reasons, but I just felt more needed to be said about it.

This is a one-shot, right? (correct me if I'm wrong.) As it stands, I think it needs a more to it, as I've said above, but as the first chapter of a novella/novel I think it would work really well. You could start with this, and then for the next chapter flashback a few years/months/whatever to explain what kind of relationship R+S have, etc, and lead up to the events of 'that night'.

That said, I really did like it - I'd give it 8.5/10

~Lizzie

Author's Response: Haha, if you were left wanting more, then that's a good thing XD I wanted the whole thing to be quite inconclusive in a way, so that the reader can draw their own conclusions and use their imaginations. Still, I'll think of rewriting it with a little more info for you guys. :)

Thank you for reviewing, and I'm glad you liked it! :)


Your Name:
Reason for this Report:

Examples:
  • The review is offensive.
  • The review is spam or chit-chat (not actually a review).
  • The review was double posted.
  • The review has formatting problems.
Repeat the number: 110
Submit Report: