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Review:Erised says:
Hey, WeasleyTwins! This is Erised with your requested review. I'm sorry it's taken ages :(

This fic is beautifully written!The formatting is perfect, and as for spelling and grammar, I noticed no abnormalities apart from this:
"Does remorse fill your very depths, how little they make be?" - it didn't make any sense to me. Maybe that's just me being thick :P

I love the fact that this story really is very mysterious. You've given just about enough information to be in the know, but left the reader to reach conclusions for themselves, very clever. However, I'd watch out with this - others people may understand parts where others don't, and vice versa.

I also thought you handled the sensitive issue very well indeed - it was very subtle, and not blunt or off-putting. Plus, it didn't go on forever, you simply summed it up in one sentence, which I liked.

Your description of the mangled body was also pretty gruesome, but not in an overdone way, so well done there.

The one thing that I would suggest is that more description was needed in some places, for instance what exactly the light looked like. Also, I felt that you alienated the reader a little from the man who murdered - I would have liked to have seen a little more emotion over his wife. However, these aren't major things. :)

Great work here, it was a pleasure to read!

Author's Response: Hello Erised! Don't worry, I am very patient ^_^

I'm glad that you thought it was beautifully written. That sentence was implying that the man who murdered had no soul :] It was supposed to say 'may' not 'make.'

I understand what you mean, but I decided when I wrote it not to give too much information. I decided that someone with enough intellect would draw their own conclusions and not need further explanation.

Yes, I had to be very careful about such a sensitive issue and I'm glad it came across okay.

I understand what you mean, but this is supposed to have a very mysterious air and that's why I did not describe the light further. The man who murdered is a ruthless man and emotion does not become him, so that's why I chose to write him the way I did.

Thanks for the review! :]



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