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Review:WeasleyTwins says:
Hello my dear. I'm here to review. I would like to apologize for the delay :]

From what I've read of your works, I love each and everything you that you write. I only have one qualm. I really wished you would have done this in third person limited. I guess I've always had something against first person. I feel that it would have made the story more intense. I do hate to give you a criticism, since you're such an amazing writer, but I actually felt bereft. Not that this wasn't good, it was amazing. Personally, third person limited would have allowed me to get more out of this.

Okay, I really do like this, no matter what I said above. You've got the emotions spot-on. It's nice to see that even though Dominique is 18 and growing older, she still feels the pangs of heartache. I really enjoyed that she wasn't a teenager, but an adult. The flow was excellent. I enjoyed that there wasn't any dialogue. Dialogue would have, more than likely, dragged the piece down. The description was beautiful.

I do so hope that you are not offended by what I said. I really did enjoy this, even if I didn't agree with your narration.

Still got to give you a 10/10

Shelby

Author's Response: Hi Shelby :) Thank you so much for reviewing.

I'm honestly not offended, don't worry. I think there is some merit in what you have to say - I've been stuch in a first person narrative for a while now, so going back to third person doesnt come so naturally to me before. I also tend to write one-shots in first person, I don't know why. I didnt even think of doing it differently before you pointed that out, so i'll be sure to think about it when I next write a new story. thank you ;)

I'm really glad that you felt it didnt need dialogue - I didnt realise until after I'd written the whole thing that there wasnt any! I suppose it's what was natural at the time.

thanks again for reviewing ^.^

- Marina


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