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Review:Coff says:
This is interesting. I never read stories written in this style, so I'm glad to give it a chance. Is it hard to find people to read your story?

Your opening sentence was brilliant. It made such an impact. Well done.

You have a fantastic way of writing in this style. All of the others that I've attempted have thrown me off - I've found it impossible to be drawn into the story. With you, however, I find that I'm drawn into the story more so than some other stories in first or third person.

This is really fantastic. I really really like it. I have no idea how to describe how much I like this. The twist at the end was unexpected, too. This whole story was unexpected - a pleasant one!

I like how subtle you were with everything. You didn't overdo anything, but nor did you underdo anything. Everything was just right. Your decriptions enhanced the story, and didn't take away from it at all, and I really felt conencted to the characters. This was brilliant!

Author's Response: I don't think it's been exactly hard to "find" people who will read this story, because many have; I've found that a lot of people have an aversion to second person and Next Generation, so I suppose that's it. But you're right that this is different, and I strongly recommend that you take a look at these sorts of stories! :)

I have ridiculous problems with starting anything, so I end up having to write something very abrupt and direct in order to build up a story, so that's why "Dominique is dead" became the first sentence - I needed a reason.

I understand that these stories are hard to get into, not just because of POV but just the general vagueness, and I agree that it's difficult to invest oneself into something like this. That's why I'm so happy that you connected to this and that you liked it. The twist at the end just HAD to come; I couldn't leave the question of her death up for debate, without at least any hints. The way this story was written, subtlety is necessary, but a story can't be Spartan either, so I'm relieved that it was enough but not too much. Thank you so much!

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