Sorry, the login doesn't like me right now.
I forgot to mention it in my thread, but I HATE second person. It's nothing personal, I promise. It's just that in general, when I'm reading, I don't like to be ordered around. When writers say stuff like, "You thought..." I feel like I should be responding, "No I didn't! Get out of my brain!" Perhaps it's just a personal paranoia. But anyway, if you're asking whether or not the second person worked, I am no the right person to ask =P
This piece of writing is immaculate. I really loved every bit of it, except the second person =P If people are complaining that the plot is too vague, that's because they're too lazy to think about what you have given them to work with. As a writer, it's important for you to develop a trusting relationship with your readers. Even though I'd only read one of your other stories, I know that you are a good writer. And when I clicked on this story and saw that you were afraid the plot was too vague, I knew it was going to be awesome. It's often the great ideas that get lost on this site, and that's really a shame. You don't have to spoon feed me every little detail. Don't be afraid to confuse readers for the sake of your own idea. As long as it makes sense to you, nothing else really matters. Yes, there will be people that will complain that it's confusing, but that's their problem. Don't compromise your good idea for someone else.
Overall, this is great. Don't change anything. Ganbare! Tanoshinde ^_^
Author's Response: That's perfectly understandable; a lot of people don't like second-person, so thank you firstly for sitting through the story :) I personally think the potential in second person is huge, considering how it tells you exactly what's happening without necessarily being intrusive, you know? But again, I respect your opinion and understand entirely.
And oh, my. Thank you so much for this encouragement, it's incredibly fulfilling. I wasn't exactly worried so much about the plot being too vague - indeed, no one has complained, per se, but they wonder - but rather, my concern was whether it was TOO too vague, you know? You are absolutely right in that an author needs to trust the audience, and I'm lucky that so far the reception has been great. Also, I've done this sort of thing many times before, where the details of the plot were never explained, and no one understood what was going on, so you can imagine my paranoia with this fic.
Again, thank you ever so much, Ilia. ^_^