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Review:Whimsical Diva says:
So, had the split the review into two as it exceeded the word count. This was the only the postscript to the review, but I'm posting it anyway.

PS:- I do have a few observations though (I didn't want to tack this on to the main review, because these are minor points):

1)Not his wife, her mother, who has been babbling to her parents ever since they arrived last night.

The subject here is Fleur, so the "her" in this sentence would refer to Fleur. So "her mother" would refer to Fleur's mother, not Dominique's mother (as you've intended it to imply). I think the sentence reads fine without the "her mother" bit.

2) The use of the word "gotten". I know you're American, and in AmE (that'd be American English), inasmuch as gotten is the past participle of get, it is perfectly permissible to use it. But in BrE (that'd be British English), we rarely ever use gotten. The past participle of get is got. Pick up any book by a British author and you'd never find the word gotten used. For me, it even sounds strange when someone uses the word gotten. Just be careful not to use gotten in dialogue, seeing as esentially, all HP characters are British. I have no issues when gotten is used in narration, seeing as non-British writers would probably narrate in their own way. But then, in my own fic, the main female character is American, so I'm going to have a tough time wrapping my head round the various Americanisms.

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