Report a Review

This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:TwilightPrincess says:
This is one of the most pure love stories I have ever read. The idea that she is pining for someone she loves but cannot have is a simple idea, but because he is her sister's lover, it adds a unique twist to it. Because of this, you made it your own, and it adds a special element to this little one-shot. I can just feel her emotion, you know? It's so raw. When you love someone you can't have, there is nothing you can do about it, and that's what makes this special.

I really really love this story. You wrote it beautifully and you did a good job of getting into Dominique's mind. Her emotions were clear and I honestly could feel her pain. It's something everyone goes through at one point or another, and I really like that you wrote about it.

I don't know what else to say. This piece is near immaculate. The only criticism I have (it's more of a preference, really) is that I didn't care for the way you opened it. It sounded really cliche, and I know that was your point, but it just kinda turned me off a little bit. It's no big deal. I just thought I'd share that with you.

Other than that, I love this piece. It's beautiful and you executed it wonderfully.

Ganbare! Tanoshinde ^_^


Author's Response: Ahh! Ilia! thank you so so much! *kicks self for not checking reviews before today*

I'm sure you know how much your opinion means to me. This is an awesome review by any standard, but because it comes from you it's just super amazingly wonderful. :D thank you so much, this has completely made my day!

The opening - i don't really have an opinion on it, other than I didnt think about it too much. I see what you mean about being cliche, but it's nice to follow the crowd once in a while, even if it was subconscious!

thanks for the review :) it's an honour to receive a review from you!

- Marina

Your Name:
Reason for this Report:

  • The review is offensive.
  • The review is spam or chit-chat (not actually a review).
  • The review was double posted.
  • The review has formatting problems.
Repeat the number: 932
Submit Report: