Thank you so much for taking up my challenge! This was stunning, and you used the title perfectly!
What I loved was how different it was to anything I've read before. You wrote in second person brilliantly, it's the best one I've read from that POV. Your imagery, descriptions and the way your worded your sentences really hit me hard, and deep. every word was meant and it i am really stunned at how well this is written.
Actually, I love that you made me work to figure out the ending! He poisened them both, right? I think that's what happened, but I just love how I'm kept guessing. there arent many authors who are brave enough to do that, so well done you :)
anyway, thank you once again for taking up my challenge, it was a pleasure reading your work :)
Author's Response: Marina, thank YOU for giving this challenge, and this title. Really, a stroke of genius.
I do strive, more than anything else, to be unique, to be different and original. So this review seriously makes it all worth it. Second person doesn't get as much love as it deserves, so I'm relieved that you liked it (and strongly suggest that you read Kay's work, which beats mine anyday). I paid a lot of attention to diction and structure in this, because of Teddy's melancholy nature and the somber, bittersweet-ish subject matter. And thank you so much for that praise - gosh, I feel so humbled right now. XD.
The ending was indeed ambiguous, and it was up to the reader to figure out what happened, but clues were scattered throughout. Your conclusion isn't what I personally had in mind, but I see how it worked for you. That's what I love about these sorts of stories, because there are so many great ideas out there. The way I meant it to be was that Victoire poisoned Dominique, and Teddy suspected her because of their previous history; that's where "oeil pour oeil" came into play: if Dominique steals Teddy from Victoire, than Victoire steals Dominique from Teddy.
Thank you, thank you, thank you - I can't say it enough, but thank you. I like this one-shot more than a lot I've written lately, so thank you again for the challenge and the review. ^_^