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Review:Inti says:
Oooh. I honestly think this is better than The Sound of Silence. Really great imagery, and a great way for them to meet =]
For critique, I still think you can work on your dialogue, an example of what I mean is: 'I'm not someone to mess with I am all bad.'
Try saying that out loud. Actually, that's a really good way to check your stories, just read them out to yourself.
Also I think you say god-like boy a bit too much. Just careful about the repetition.
Really nice one-shot Lore! XD

Author's Response: Yay thanks Jack i know it has a lot more descriptions in it than tSoS and not as much dialogue. I will read my stories out loud thanks for the tip hun and i will get a beta still . I will delete some of the god-like lol thanks so much for the review ily!

Lore


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