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Review:Hermione Potter452 says:
oh my. that was really really really good. siriusly. it was amazing. you did a REALLY good job writing everything. you wrote her emotions perfectly. i liked how you made each step a year of her life, a lot. it was brilliant. amazing job.

just a couple writing things i caught:
everytime a new person has dialogue, it's a new paragraph. like, when lily talks it's a paragraph. then when james says something to her, that's another paragraph. but it's all good. you made it clear who was saying each quote.

and the last "no" that lily says. that was kind of confusing. i dunno. i kinda thought she was saying no to his asking her not to leave, or something. i dunno. maybe it was just the way my brain worked when i read that. haha.

other than those two minor things, this story was amazingly brilliant. AMAZING job! please keep writing! you're really good!

~ Danica

Author's Response: Awww thanks! It's so friggin' cool when I get a long review. Love it. I should go back and fix the dialogue, so, will get around to that eventually. And I'm still thinking about that Lily line...I want to get it perfect before I change it, ya know? But thank you so much for the review! It so made my night.

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