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Review:Chloe says:
Random.Thoughts on the boards. Forgot password and too lazy to retrieve it. Anyways, happy late Christmas Secret Santa here is a review for you!

I actually have already read this in the past, or at least I think I have. I think it was one of the reviews lost during the major thing beforehand. But I'll review it again.

First, I wanted to point out this line because it was really good. "catching flies with her jaw wide open." I'm not sure why, but it completely stood out to me. :)

Next, I think you did a great job characterizing Lucius Malfoy. The lines he said really felt as if he was saying them. You could imagine him talking about how weak she was and how she hadn't done anything to his clothing.

Also, I feel like you could have done a little more details. Describing the battle scene can really help the readers believe in it more, not just the action. Although the action was good as well.

All in all, it was really good. It seems near the end that you might be building up to a Rose/Scopius thing? Or was that just for the one shot?

See you around!
Chloe

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review and happy holidays to yourself (sorry about the password thing hehe)

I actually do have a R/S fic in the works, and originally, these were separate stories, but after reading all the reviews i've recieved (which instead of the 8 it was, is now down to 5) i'm thinking maybe of refurbishing the R/S fic to enclude this little diddy... it could work now that i think about it.

Anywayz, thanks again for the review!! see you around the forums!


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