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Review:LonelyWriter says:
Hey, this is LilyLuna from the forums with the review you requested :)

I love the way you narrated the one-shot. It was skillfully done, and it reminded me of the you'd tell a fairytale or something like that. I'm not sure who the narrator is meant to be, but I liked the fact they you're not sure, because it leaves an air of mystery that I like.

The overall grammar and spelling in the one-shot was good. I didn't see any mistake. And pace and flow was also good. Your writing style though, is great. You can write particularly well.

There wasn't much characterization in the story, and I think you could have added a bit more about Andromeda, but the characterization of her that was there was good.

Apart from bring a bit more of Andromeda into the story, there is nothing else I could complain about in this. You did a great job writing this! Well done.

9/10

Author's Response: Hey LilyLuna! Thank you! Well as I've mentioned...this was inspired by Frank Capra's movie "It's A Wonderful Life" which also has that fairy tale quality. I actually thought this would be filled with cheesy cheese because of its moralistic feel to it but I could definitely see what you man about the fairy tale thing...especially with Andy's past (which in the story I'm planning for that ship has also that feel.) The narrator was Ted, actually but it's really nice to know you liked the mystery quality. I wanted it to be mysterious at first but at the end, reveal who it was. Thank you for reviewing!

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