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Review:SpringTime says:
I forgot to mention last chapter but I thought that the school was SFU and in last chapter you have it as SCU, just thought I would point that out.

There were still some typos in this and the tense changes from past to present a few times.
I like the possible tension that you are creating.
I do also want to mention the time line...I thought that they were going to the part the night of the first lesson, but then you had said that she had been there a week and then they werent supposed to get the dragons for two weeks but in this you said that they would be getting it that monday? Maybe I am reading it wrong, but thought I would point it out none the less.
I am glad that you so far havent made Lisa go after Charlie, that would be very un freindlike.
see you next chapter.

Author's Response: OMG, I feel so stupid right now. *hides* This is what happened when you update after three months without thoroughly reading the previous chapter. The timeline problem is entirely my fault. I changed my mind midway through writing and completely forgot to check the previous chapter. So sorry! And thank you for pointing that out! I've been told that I messed up the timeline, but I kept putting off editing it because it's quite a big thing to tackle. But I'm working on it right now and will fix it right away!

I thought about making Lisa go after Charlie but quickly dismissed it. As you said, it's not something a friend would ever do. ^_^

Thank you so much for the wonderful review!

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