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Review:SpringTime says:
Hey, come to review your story, I will try to get most of it done today.
You write very well, and so far the flow is very steady. I would suggest maybe adding a bit more to the part that explains her mothers death more, that was the one sections that I felt could use some more detail and description.
Since it is only the first chapter and I am not yet sure how this is going to go you can ignore this comment if it doesnt apply, but I just wanted to warn you about making Charlie too nice, dont get me wrong I think of him as a nice guy, but he is also a Dragon trainer and a Weasley (so I feel a little smart aleckyness (as I cannot say the word that really should be there) would apply to him later) This is also a personal oppinion though and since it is your story characterization is up to you.
So far though it is a nice beginning. :)

Author's Response: Hello! I'm glad that you enjoy it. Thank you for pointing out about her mother's death. I didn't think that it was necessary to explain it all at the beginning, but I promise it will be given more details as the story goes on. ^_^ I'm working on showing Charlie's character more in the chapter I'm working on, so thank you for the comment about him too! =D

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