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Review:Browneyes101 says:
Here I am just as requested. :)

I would just like to tell you how sorry I am for not reviewing this sooner. This is exams week at my school so lately I've only had time to study; I only have one more day of this stress then my reviewing will be up and going again. Now I'm probably going to answer a question that you have been saying over and over in your head: She didn't put my story on her waiting list so she won't review mine sense it's on her 'No Reads' list. That's not true, but the irony of it is is that I will only review this chapter. I know that in my rules it says that I will review three chapter, but since this is a special case I will only do one. It's not that your novel is not great or anything (It was really good) but I just don't read Sirus/Hermione stories, even if she is above 17, you know what I'm saying? So instead of giving you three short reviews I'm going to give you one long one. As you can tell this lovely paragraph that I'm typing now is quiet long. Now onward to the incredibly long review!

Okay, first let me go over the good stuff then we can get onto the evil, annoying part of the review.

I really loved the character descriptions you put into this. I thought that I was really reading about the real Hermione that J.K. wrote about. Yes it was that good! I'm probably making your ego soar right now aren't I? Good, just so long as it doesn't go to your head. The dialog was excellent, it ran smoothly and clear; I could tell exceatly what they were saying and to who. The descriptions were wonderful, I really felt like I was there and in the moment. I could clearly see the picture you were trying to paint.

Now to the part that I hate with a passion.

I'm going to blunt with you, this chapter was going too fast for my liking, hey maybe that's just me, and I do think that you need to slow it down. The hint of that relationships is a bit too fast, it's like you want to go straight to them and not involve the other characters, normally the love intrest doesn't really find out about the fact that the girl/guy likes them and does something about it but you just jumped right into it without thinking this out realisticly. Love takes time to blossom and even longer for a person to realize that they love the other person; I could see Harry going up to Sirus and telling him that Hermione fancies him in chapter five or six because that gives her enough time to realize that hey maybe this isn't just a crush I'm feeling here. She was probably feeling this before her current age but that still doesn't mean that it should go right to her liking him.

Wow I think that this is the longest review I've ever typed!

I hope I helped. 9/10

Author's Response: Well, since you are'nt going to read the rest of the story... I'll just say that where I started this story, was on purpose... In fact I'll PM you lol. Thanks for the awsome review! lol...

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