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Review:Browneyes101 says:
Here I am as requsted. :)

I really loved the dialog in this chapter, you really have a way when two characters are talking to enteract them together if you know what I mean. You also had great description but their is always room for improvment.

I didn't see any small details that tells me about the main character. You need small details as much as you need descriptions, they are just as important. I suggest talking about Romida's personality in the next chapter, put more of her character into it.

Hope I helped. 8/10

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing!

I appreciate your comment about my dialogue. That's something I work hard on. :)

Yeah, I plan on continuing showing her character through more action. Right now I'm basically just introducing you to her. I'm showing, not telling, Romilda.

Thanks again!

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