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Review:Sunflower says:
wow... that was... sad and... kinda creepy?

While I lie here, in the darkness of the night, just on the edge of going into 'The Forgotten' and I can see movement in the shadows, I should tell you who I am.
- this part doesn't work for me quite; the last part seems very sudden and doesn't really fit with the rest.

either it should be;
While I lie here, in the darkness of the night, just on the edge of going into 'The Forgotten' where I can see movement in the shadows, I should tell you who I am.

or

While I lie here, in the darkness of the night, just on the edge of going into 'The Forgotten', I should tell you who I am.

other than that this was a really nice piece - not that fluffy I'd say but it gave a whole new perspective on things.

Congrats on the ending: it was totally unexpected that Lily would be dead.

I thought it was very sad: to be lost and not be found before your owner is gone. I wouldn't think I would be with her forever because she wouldn't be there, she would be like him, unmovable. Dead. But, yeah, guess it's a bear's pov :P

It was a very very nice and different story:]

Author's Response: thank you.
I'll change the part that you pointed out =]
I wrote this because I like doing different POV's that haven't been done before.
And about the ending, the bear will live on forever and ever, and it doesn't really think about the fact that it's owner is dead, just that its back with her.
thanks!


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