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This was beautiful, I couldn't sense at all that you dislike this ship. The characterisation of Harry was magnificent; the whole scene in the wedding chamber was amazing and so sad, it was perfect, especially the last line where he tells Hermione, 'Be happy'.
The ending was extremely good as well, Harry would never have reached out and taken Hermione from Ron; he would rather sulk by himself (forgive me for saying this) and live on in misery, knowing that Hermione and ron are happy. Always self-sacrificing.
This part I loved:
Harry wanted to wipe her tears but knew he couldn't. Not only was he forbidden to look at her, her tears belonged to someone else now.
the part that didn't work for me was the fact that Harry, Hermione and Ron hadn't kept contact. It just doesn't seem realistic. Hermione, for one, would never allow it, Ron's mum would never let him, and Harry and Ron are best mates. I doubt it would happen, even though Harry wouldn't want to hang around to see the two together, no, I don't think they'd let him.
It was very sad, thinking he was all alone, Ginny engaged, he never saw his friends, then he practically had nobody?
I loved the story, but thinking about it; I don't think it would ever happen that he would lose contact. Sure people grow apart, but not the TRIO..
The lyrics fit perfectly to the story, absolutely perfectly.
What I would have liked was maybe a little more indicating on Hermione's feelings. It was a bit unclear I felt, whether or not she was in love with him or not. Im guessing she was and she just moved on, with Ron.
Overall it was an amazing piece of work, no typo's and spelling seemed fine.
So very heartfelt and sad, it was extremely well-written.
Very well done!!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I can't thank you enough, really. That section you picked out was one that I worked really hard on and I was hoping someone would notice it. Thanks!
Well, I understand your concern about the trio not really keeping in touch, but in all fairness I did label the story AU. And for the sake of my plot, they had to keep out of contact so that it was awkward to see each other at the reunion. I'm sorry you didn't care for this aspect.
About adding Hermione's feelings, I didn't want to add her side of the story because I wanted this to really be all about Harry. I chose not to add Hermione's thoughts because I showed all I wanted to show in the scene where they stood back to back. I wanted the reader to inference based on what I'd already written about Harry. Thank you for guessing. That's what I wanted you to do, but I'm sorry if you didn't like it.
Thank you so much! I really appreciate your review ^_^