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Review:hsw says:
Upon reading the reviews for the last chapter, I realized everyone else seems to like Siobhan's character too. You can really be proud of her, because you have done something well if so many people notice! You develop Molly and Arthur well also, but since they aren't your characters, I know I have preconceptions that affect my reading of your story. Siobhan is a bit mysterious and more interesting than Hattie and Cecilia and more likeable than Reid. If you ever have an idea for another Siobhan one-shot, I would love to read it, and it seems I'm not the only one.

About this chapter: I was not crazy about the ending. The kiss-me-again/you're-bossy exchange struck me as a bit odd. I think part of the reason that ending seemed a bit weird to me is because this scene leads right into an Arthur-and-Molly oriented scene in "Unsinkable." That probably put a little box around it all that limited your options somewhat. I was going to say I would have preferred it to end with the "Reid looked pleased . . ." sentence, but that's not it. I like the exchange after that, up until the "Kiss me again" part. Maybe I got stuck on the "finally" in the last sentence. Anyway, I do not have any better ideas myself, and I like that you left it open-ended the way you did, without going into developing their relationship.

The whole rest of this chapter I liked. Mostly I liked that Cecilia finally was able to let go of her anger about the fireworks incident. Not that she needed to get together with Reid to do that, but I'm really glad for her that the Reid situation prompted her to relax about it. Mind, I get a kick out of each time she says, "He set me on FIRE," but she really blew the incident out of proportion. It is nice that they managed to find their way back to where they were before the fireworks disaster. I bet part of the reason she was so confused is that the fireworks artificially arrested what they felt for each other earlier, and the situation was haning unresolved over them. It was necessary to resolve it somehow, either by getting together or by forgiveness and going separate ways.

After that long, rambling paragraph, here is a shorter one. I liked seeing even more of Reid's "human" and emotional side in this chapter. He is more complex than he seems at first. He still would not be my favorite person though.

That said, I am amazed that you have put up another story since I was here a few days ago! I plan to make progress during the next month. I sort of tend to stretch out reading your stories because I like knowing there is something to come back to that I haven't read, but I am falling behind!

Author's Response: The ending came off a little meh to me too, but I hadn't come up with anything better. Might rewrite that at some point.

I do have a Siobhan one-shot posted, I think you've read it though - "The Black Velvet Band." I might write more on her later, I have several other things in mind right now that I'm working on first. She is a very popular character with my readers. I do like her very much.

Cecilia and Reid, well, their relationship future will be coming up as a side story in the Molly/Arthur elopement I'm planning. Cecilia definitely had blown the fireworks wildly out of proportion. She's not the type who takes well to public embarrassment like that, poor thing. That's a great way to describe it, artificially arrested. Exactly right. Reid has more to him than he likes to show, he's a very smart boy, but he is, after all, a teenage boy, and wants to be cool and funny more than he wants to be real. I dated a lot of guys like that in high school...

I always enjoy your reviews so much. I appreciate the time you put into them, and that you're always honest - usually the bits you point out as not liking are ones I wasn't too keen on when writing them, lol. Thank you so much!


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