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Review:RoseLolly says:
I'm Australian actually. I flutter back and forth between 'full stop' and 'period'. Full stop makes me feel as though i'm still in Kindergarten writing strange little captions under god-awful pictures of my own creation...

I wasn't the slightest bit offended =) Your story is so lovely, well written and all that I could tell it was probably a taught thing rather that, er, something else? Hehe. I hope it wasn't interpreted the wrong way though.

I've found myself falling into the story much more now anyway, it's sort of just like reading 'mom' instead of 'mum' it's easy enough to overlook, but you still notice it, just because it's odd to you.

Lily is really quite deliciously endearing. And yes, while I found his interest at her laugh-the first chapter, I mean, I found that a tad...questionable at first. But you've tied it in so so well with his passing observations...it's really lovely.

What about her? Nia supposed it would be goof for Bella too.

Amusing typo, but I thought I'd tell you anyway =P Gah. I hope I'm not coming across negatively, because I genuinely admire you for this story. It's such a lovely believable interpretation of their relationship. Completely refreshing to read.

-Rose.

Author's Response: Ugh, stupid typo. I need to go fix that now, thank you for pointing it out. And you don't come across negatively at all, I appreciate the critique, it is very very useful, so thank you. And I totally know about the 'mom' thing, that always makes me wrinkle my nose a little when I read it.

I think the laugh was not so much a reason behind his interest as it was a trigger because the Lily that we see patrolling with James in the first chapter was the only one he'd ever known so he would never have associated her with anything in the least carefree or inviting and it surprises him. It's not 'wow, looking at her laughing, I'm in love'. Although I can understand why it would seem that way at first glance, haha.

Thank you again for your review, and I shall go sort out that 'goof' now.


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