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Review:Nymphie Lupin says:
LMFAO, well, I'm ba-ack. It's been so long since I've read some fan fics! This is my first since like, mid-August. I feel like I'm a negligent fangirl, you know. LOL!

Bex, you are SUCH an effing grammar nazi. *shakes head solemnly* I actually LOOKED for mistakes and couldn't find any. :P

This is, thus far, excellent. I love how natural the dialog is. It's like me talking with my friends. I can't stand when dialog in a story is awkward. You two have totally mastered the art of writing dialog. It's interesting but STILL completely believable. Great job.

I love your characterizations. I like how very extreme they are. You have the shy girl with piercings and tatoos (which is pretty much contradictory, but that's what makes it work. You'd expect her to be a total bad ass, but in straying from the stereotype, you're both capturing ACTUAL human emotions. Kudos!) Then you have Claudia who is the prankster and is totally chill. LOL, she's basically Cassie's polar opposite. But in their differences, they are still so sisterly.

In summary: AWESOME CHARACTERIZATIONS!

I'm kind of wondering what's up with Vincent being the fave child (I'm assuming) and who the hell this "greasy haired git" is that Elizabeth is marrying... So... are you gonna tell me or am I going to have to read. :( I'd prefer being told. It's so much funner that way! :P

By the way, Lauren, your graphics are BRILLIANT! I've seen some of Bexi's new banners. They're beautiful. XD

First Chapter = 10/10 (LOL! Bex, YOU'RE SLACKING!)

Can't wait for an update!

-Shea

Author's Response: Hey hey Shea! ;D

First, TY VERY MUCH FOR THE GRAMMAR CHECKING. And why exactly were you looking out for mistakes? You know I don't make any...:P


Cheers for the dialogue, that was exactly what we were going for because they're twins and speak so fluently to each other. :)

Also, thanks for the characterisations! That's what we were going for as well, we didn't want to give Claudia the piercings etc. because to be honest it would be completely stereotypical of the prankster/more outspoken one to do something like that. We like to mix it up a little ;)

Also, I think you didn't understand properly darling. Elizabeth is their mother, she is trying to get Claudia to marry the "greasy-haired git"

Can you not comprendé?! Tis Snapey :) The only greasy-haired git we like!!

(Or, you know, maybe just me. Not Lauren.)

And Vincent is like the youngest. He's got a bit of a mummy's boy thing going on. And he's Pureblooded Slytherin all the way, y'see, so mummy and daddy like that. No "Mudblood" friends, as it were.

Anywho. Lauren says cheers lots for the banner compliments! Told you she has skillz. :)

HAHA, totally slacking. ;D

Love you!!! Thanks for reviewing again!!

-becky and lauren.


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