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Review:Ghost Chicken says:
Whoa...slow down. This is looking a bit rushed. This is your story, but consider something. Blaise wants to do the Cliff Mortor thing right off. I'm guessing he either wants out or he's really out to do Hermione and the Order in.

Hermione's too smart to just go off half-cocked like that. She was right to tell Blaise they need to accomplish this mission before they do that, the reason being that they have to gain Voldemort's trust. I'm thinking Nagini is on to Hermione and that's why she hates her so much--not to mention the fact that Hermione is a vampire.

Again, these are just some thoughts your story has provoked, but I'm going to hold back on the one I half-mentioned before. Good job.

Author's Response: yea, i think that i've had the idea of Blais epossibly betraying her, but i think i shot that one down. And yea, your right about the whole thing withhermione. I wwanted her to come off more cautious, but that didn't turn out to well obviosly. lol. me and my beta are still editing, and we are going to go back and fix this kind of stuff, so keep giving advice!

And i think i will elaborate more on hermione and Nagina. it's coming up in futher chapters...
Thanks!

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