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Review:ButterflyRogue says:
First of all, I absolutely must mention the wonderfully detailed beginning. The exquisite description of Percy's surroundings simply pulls a reader right into the story, I was hooked from the very first sentence. Just by managing to compose such an amazing beginning, makes you an amazing author already... :)

The depth of your comparisons is also amazing. You draw a very vivid parallel with his surroundings and the memories such scenery evokes. It's almost like reading poetry!

Your characterization of Percy is just perfect! You've definitely given him an entirely new dimension. He's a complex character nobody gives a second thought to, I never really cared much for him myself, but this story definitely changed my perspective on him.
You've shown Percy's struggles very well. It must have been so hard for him to swallow his pride and admit his mistake. You've shown different layers of his character and defined him better than he had been defined in the actual books, especially in the scene with the mirror, when he hopes to be just as his father - something that he, at first, wanted to deny. Percy is such an underestimated character, most authors simply ignore his existence, but you've characterized him so fully and so realistically, I could practically see him as a whole person stepping out of the boundaries of HP books and fanfiction.
The reason for his frequent visits to Hogsmeade - to look at Hogwarts and remember his glorious days as a Prefect, Head Boy and a star student - was a very nice touch. It shows exactly how far had his ambition driven him and how deep his remorse in fact was.

I also liked the introduction of Aberforth as a sort of an adviser and the person who called for him when the actual fight started to take place. I like Aberforth very much for some reason so it's no wonder I liked him here as well... :D

Some of my favorite parts:
"He kept going to work, because he did not know what else to do. Arthur Weasley came in to work every day with his head held high, saw the evil around him and stood against it. He spoke harshly to those he saw committing injustices, even though it put him at personal risk. He stood strong for Dumbledore's memory, and continued to press for Muggle rights in the face of a government that did not even see Muggle-born witches and wizards as human. Percy was proud of his father, and ashamed to be his son because he did not believe he could be as good and brave a man as his father was." - this is such a good description of both Arthur and Percy. It's almost ironic how much it brings them together and drives them even further apart at the same time.

"But somehow nothing had gone right after he'd left home, and the person he'd tried to be had never been real, and the person he became instead was not someone he would ever wish to be. He had cut himself off at the knees, destroyed the very roots that would have steadied him through the storms, and now he was alone, without an anchor in a sea of evil." - so beautifully said...

Amazing job! It was such a pleasure reading this beautifully crafted story...

~Vedrana (Rosie Nymphadora at eHPF)

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