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Review:ChoS_sista_gurl says:
Hey there, here to review as you requested!

To be honest, I have a personal bias against writing in present tense and first/second person. I just find that it sometimes sounds awkward or hard to follow. But that's just me, so you shouldn't be concerned.

Anyway, it didn't stop me from enjoying your storyline very much. It was nice to read about Bellatrix and Rodolphus's relationship before the stress of the Death Eater life (and Bella's obsession with Voldemort) probably darkened their lives. Your writing flowed very well.

Your characterization was also, overall, great. I love how you showed a humane side of the young Death Eaters: how Rodolphus was quiet and introverted, how Bellatrix became embarassed in front of him, and (my personal favorite) how Lucius was helping a young Slytherin with his Transfiguration homework. It's a side of them that I'm sure they did have, especially when they were younger, but is not always portrayed in the books.

Although Rodolphus, Lucius, and Narcissa were all well-characterized, I found that Bellatrix seemed to drift in and out of character. Her description at the beginning fit well, as did her actions during their date. The only thing is, I don't think she would have been so friendly to Sirius. At that point, it was already known all through the Black family that he was a Gryffindor and in the company of bloodtraitors and half-bloods. She might not have been violent towards him, per se, but definitely colder. She might have just ignored him.

All in all, I enjoyed reading this very much. It almost makes me like Rodolphus and Bella. =]

Keep up the good work!

~CSG

Author's Response: Hey!

I'm glad you still enjoyed it despite the fact that it was written in a POV that you don't like. This was my first time writing like this, I usually prefer third person.

I was a bit worried when I was given this challenge because I had no idea how to write a fluffy Bellatrix fic. Rodolphus isn't written about very much so I figured that he could get his time to shine in my story (another reason why it is in his point of view).

I never pictured him as a quiet young man, to tell the truth, but I thought it would've been a nice change. Writing an embarrassed Bella was my favourite part, you don't see it so often and it was funny too. I don't know if you realised that the young Slytherin Lucius was helping was Snape. I'm not sure if I made that clear enough.

Bellatrix was supposed to be out of character in this story, I think I mentioned that in my Author's Note, though I admit she should've been a bit cold to him. Sirius being sorted into Gryffindor and be-friending blood-traitors didn't even occur to me!

I'm really glad you enjoyed it, I think, after writing this that I'm a huge Rodolphus fan (I always used to feel sorry for him in the books).

Thanks for the great review!
Lia.


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