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Review:maraudersmap says:
Hi, this is maraudersmap from the forum. :)

Wow. I'm speechless.

I've always been very fascinated by Regulus' character, and I think your take on him is... well, marvelous. I rarely cry when I read fanfiction, but this actually brought a tear to my eye.. :)

Your writing is simple, elegant and beautiful. It's perfect. The fact that it was a letter to Sirius from Regulus was brilliant. It made the whole chapter much more personal, and in turn, more touching.

I like that Regulus always admired Sirius and wanted to be like him, and the reason he wasn't. You wrote his conflicting emotions very well.

I loved how you repeated the line: 'because she smiled'. It was so simple and heartbreaking at the same time. Everything changed because she smiled.

That he kept watching her but never actually dared to talk to her was so sad! She meant so much to him without even knowing it. Or did she? I love your description of her eyes, by the way.

I'm trying to be constructive, I really am. It's just so hard when this story is so wonderful. Perhaps the ending was a little awkward? Don't get me wrong - I love the idea of her being the reason Regulus did what he did - but the ending paragraphs seemed a little unnatural.

This would have been perfect as a one-shot as well! If you do continue it, though, I'd love for it to be a Regulus/OC. Overall: Amazing! :D

Author's Response: Sorry for the huge delay in response, it's been pretty hectic lately. *hands you a virtual tissue* that's an amazing compliment in itself. :)

The line 'Because she smiled' was the title of the banner/title challenge, so I tried to incorporate it as centrally as possible. Really happy to hear that that came across well.

Did she indeed?

Okay, thanks for pointing out the awkwardness of the ending -- I'd been a little worried about inching towards cliche-dom. Thank you so much for the lovely comments!


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