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Review:Leo072491 says:
Interesting view on Hogwarts's males. I've never read a story like this so congratulations on coming up with something unique and all your own :) I like how the Gryffindor boys were more willing to do something daring and the part where you mwntioned how the Ravenclaws didn't idolize Madame Pince, much.

Although I liked the idea the plot seems a bit random. Like your ideas are scattered all over the place. I suggest trying to make a plot chart or something. That would really help in organizing your ideas. The only other potential problem I saw was that the reasons why they boys were where they were and why they were talking about what they were talking about wasn't made clear so you might want to think through that a tad too.

Other than that nice first chapter and continuing writing! :)

~Leo

Author's Response: Well, the idea wasn't completely my own, it was for a 'Male Mind' challenge, but I'm glad you liked it anyway.
It's just meant to be a funny one-shot, so there won't be any more chapters, but I appreciate your comments.
Thanks for the review =]


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