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Review:lia_2390 says:
Hey Eridanus!

I really enjoyed your story; it seemed to be that you were kind of satirising the stereotypes for each house (you had the brave kids, the vain ones and the nerds but you gave Hufflepuff some edge) was that your intention? I honestly thought the Ravenclaw scene was gold though :D

I also noticed a few typos, mainly your quotation marks -
[...drawled Blaise while the other three boys guffawed at Draco’s current predicament.”] - the inverted commas shouldn't be there. Another one is missing from the beginning Anthony's speech in the library - [Those are all valid points...] and you're missing a word from here -[declared Zacharias contentedly as he his seat on a particularly comfortable pouffe.]

It wouldn't hurt to include "said" sometimes too, even if you use words like "demanded" or "murmured"; I know you used it in here but it's kind of overshadowed by its alternates, to me it seems overdone (at least sort of).

Overall I think it was well written, those Hufflepuffs are a witty bunch, aren't they? I can't believe Zacharias had a thing for Trelawney XD

Good Job!
Lia.

Author's Response: Hey,
You're completely right, I was trying to make fun of their traits whilst giving the Huffepuffs a bit of street cred Lol They get overlooked a lot. I liked the Ravenclaws best too, I think it's because I could easily imagine them like that!
Typos etc. all fixed now and I understood what you meant about the 'said's and added some more here and there.
Why not? She's so... to be honest there are no words for her Lol
Thanks so much for the review =]


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