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Review:subtle_plan says:
Aw, that was so sad :(

subtle_plan here, with your review. sorry it took me a bit longer than I expected: something came up, so I had to run for a few days.

I really enjoyed this story! I really liked it. The writing might not be completely flawless; at places, to me, it seemed a bit bare and naked. A bit more descriptions would do, although, as I said, only at certain places. The first paragraph of a new flashback was always so perfectly written you drew a perfect picture of the scenery, so kudos for that. I would just try to slide in a bit more scenery everywhere else, to keep the mental picture alive.

Other than that I did, as I said, love your plot-line. I did not see that ending coming; it was great, but yet so sad.

There's room for improvement, but then again, isn't there always? I thought your writing was pretty much amazing all the way through. If I were to alter anything I would change the beginning leading up to the first flashback; it was a bit long and drawn-out, and if I had not promised to read I would have probably dropped out there and gone hunting for another story.

So there you go :) Write more, and pretty soon you'll be amazing!

Author's Response: i see what you mean by the nakedness :) i'll write some in, thanks for the advice. and i'll probably cut down on the beginning, so thanks as well! im glad you enjoyed it, so thanks for the AMAZING review :)

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