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great story but i think i might know what would have made this story a little better. Lily and severus were good friends at one point right? well i think that their old friendship wasnt shown clearly enough in their emotions. They mentioned the friendship several times but i imagine that even after fifth year they must have had a few close moments in which their old friendship would be shown. maybe a long conversation at the lake or something of that nature. Also, in your story, there really was no closure to how Lily felt towards snape friend-wise. did she end up still hating him, despite the impulsve kiss? or does she forgive him for calling her a mudblood? kinda vague. but apart from that, it was definetly a pretty good closure. just try to work out the structure of your plot properly before you write your story next time. good job :D

Author's Response: Thank you for this review. I felt that too. As I'm currently putting out a revised version of James's Sketchbook, I've been thinking a lot about this review and how I can improve showing the snape-lily friendship. Thank you.

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