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Review:rosai_gryffindor says:
hummm... what to say?

lol! :D

no, this is extremely brilliant, this is why i'm not sure how to go about reviewing! simply because it is so intense and angsty! i thought you wrote it very well, with loads of emotion and vivid descriptions, i really felt as if i were there! and i like for a change how mean and snappy lily is, i think a lot of the time shes too nice and 'i hate james potter but secretly i dont'. in this story, you bring across the impression nicely that she really does hate him in a very heartless and selfish way, and that his now ill condition is bringing her down to earth and shocking her with the truth of the matter; that james is a human being like everyone else, and has feelings that can be hurt and hopes that can be crushed!

you also wrote the urgency of the situation brilliantly, and sirius' character hit me as being quite strong and true. that flashback was also a nice touch, it wasnt too long or too short, and gave us a good insight to how things were with james and lily!

so, great start! apart from the few grammar mistakes and typos this was wonderful!

will be back to review part two in a bit!

Rose :)

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