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Review:Browneyes101 says:
Here I am again. :)

I would like to tell you that I only review the first two chapters. You can request another two chapters if I have a spot open; just put I would like you to review for me again, or something like that, and put you link. Now, review time.

I liked that you put this chapter in Harry's POV. It makes it seem more interesting and very well thought out. The end was kinda funny; Harry's reaction to Lupin and Haley leaving him like that. I know it was a serious moment, but I couldn't help but laugh when I picture Harry in my head after that.

Bad news. I think that this all happened a bit fast in this chapter. Maybe you could slow it do a bit by adding description, or putting mini plots here and there. I would go with the description but I've always been a big description person and some people just aren't, so I would advise you to be careful about that.

All-in-all, a very good two chapters. Can't wait to see what happens next, but I have other reviews to get to so come by and request again. Hope I helped.8/10


Author's Response: Two reviews is plenty but I will definitely drop in again to request the next 2 chapters :)

I'm glad that you enjoyed reading Harry's POV. I tried to make his actions and thoughts realistic so I hope I achieved that.

I was a little surprised that you found that this chapter moved too quickly but I appreciate your thoughts. As I think I mentioned in my previous response to your review I'm going to do a major editing project so I will take your advice into consideration.

Once again, glad you liked it and thanks for the review!

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