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Review:greylady_Ravenclaw says:
This was different than I expected. I'm just wondering why the auror had to kill two unarmed muggles. It would make more sense to me that Voldemort would have him take one something or someone more powerful than just a pair of muggles. I only noticed one thing that interrupted the flow of your story:

"Mr. Britton was the heads banker at the National Bank of the Netherlands, so he had a keen sense of what it took to be successful."

Should heads be head? It makes more sense to me, but I may have just read the sentence wrong. It was a good start. 8/10

Author's Response: I'm glad it seems different. The reason behimnd killing two muggles instead of killing someone important was because this was when Voldemort was just starting to form. He wouldn't have wanted to have done something that but him in the spot light quite yet.

It should be head, thanks for pointing out the mistake!

Thanks for the review.

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