Wow, a breakup with Vernon. Hmmm, thats interesting. I wonder how you're going to get them back together. From what I can see, it looked as though Vernon was going to propose, yet that appears to be off for the moment. I totally like Nathan a lot more...
Oh well, I am curious as to how this whole thing will get resolved. Plus, I would say that some mention of Lily and the wizarding world might not hurt. I know that this story is primarily about Petunia, but the fact that there needs to be some sort of split, and we have seen the basis, but not the actual event makes this story feel a little unfinished (now I feel bad). I guess maybe just having Lily visit, or something like that would be good. Perhaps a phone call where Petunia tells her how she is feeling about the Vernon/Nathan situation.
Otherwise, really good job, and I hope you keep on writing!!
Author's Response: Oh, well...I honestly don't think that any lasting relationship has gone without a few snags. And Petunia is a lovely girl. She needs to get out some more. This is going to be canon pre-DH, so no, she can't end up with Nathan...:(
Vernon will propose in due course. He's got to take his time to realize Petunia's sheer awesomeness.
I was planning on putting Lily and James into the next chapter, as I think you're right, and she's been gone a lot from this fic. I blame part of this due to my scant updates, in which I sort of lost track of what I was writing, and part of this because I get carried away a lot. And don't you DARE feel bad. Criticism is the only way you learn, and it's one of the most effective ways to grow as a writer. You should probably know that I'm not going to hesitate in giving you crit, so please, by all means, if you see something you don't like, comment away.
The real split itself is going to happen much later in the story. There might be some cracks that are going to form now, but for the moment, the split itself doesn't happen for a few years...
I've decided, Lily is going to be in the next chapter. She was going to be there anyways, but now it's cemented that she will be.
Gords, I've gotta say, I've probably written two chapters worth of words in my responses to your great reviews, and I'd like to thank you for that. I can't even begin to say this enough to all of my reivewers, but getting me to look at my own work and comment with you is probably one of the best things to do. I really do mean it *is getting repetitive* when I say that reviews like yours are amazing. Honestly, my writing is only still going now because of reviewers like you.
*sounds like pbs but doesn't care*
Thank you. :)