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Review:Gords7015 says:
Helo Petunia...

Haha, nice chapter. I didn't think that this was cliched, but the horn thing probably has been done before. I think it'd be funnier if Vernon's foot slipped off the brake or something and he knocked over some trashcans. Or, maybe he drove a stick and his foot slipped off the clutch and the car lurched forward before stalling with a loud clunk?

Otherwise, its weird to see Vernon as nervous, and to see their first kiss. I have to think that Vernon somehow influences his future wife and her feelings.

I found it ironic that Petunia complained about cleaning the tables, because she is so OCD about it later in life...

Overall, a very good chapter!

Author's Response: Yes, well having very uhm...limited experience with this, I couldn't for the life of me figure out what to put. I hated writing this chapter, and as a warning, all romance chapters in the future are likely to be very...light. Simply because I don't have the experience to back up any of what I say.

I like the suggestion of Vernon pressing the gas though...that's a VERY good idea...and if I use it, I'll be sure to credit. :)

As far as Vernon is concerned, I wanted to step away from the usual "Vernon doesn't REALLY love Petunia, she's a trophy wife' thing. It happens in a lot of existing Petunia fics, which is a large part of why I didn't want to put it in here. You will have noticed that I never once mention Petunia being jealous of Lily in any way, shape, or form, because for one thing, this is in the first person, and I highly doubt that she'd acknowledge that. With Vernon and Lily, I like to think that Petunia sees the best in them, even though Lily may cross the line and that could change...

Vernon has an influence, but none that Petnuia realizes. I mean, if you were in love with someone, would you be able to realize the power they had on you to its full extent? That's a problem with writing first person, is that you only ever see one point of view. But in the case of this story, it works better for me...

And I'm glad you caught the thing with the tables. :)


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