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Review:Elysium says:
My goodness, darling where do I begin? Firstly can I say thank you for having dedicated this truly amazing piece to me. It has quite literally taken my breath away.

Your command of 2nd Person Pov was astounding - you most definitely achieved what you had hoped, well with me in any case. I was utterly captivated - and you know how much I adore the technique of not using names to describe your characters. And you pull it off so well... even before you said his name I knew it was Ron (god I hate him!). Your characters - all of them - but most particularly Hermione and Ron were so deliciously flawed. The weariness and the exhaustion from maintaining their facades flooded through the entire piece - it was saddening, and yet at the same time it seemed so right for them to come to that final close.

Your transitions from one character to the next were so delicate, that one really had to be connected to follow - and I was. You didn't labour the change, and it was all the more potent for it.

And, oh! the references to dust were beautiful, like a symbol of their relationship - the way he kicks the dust up on the stairs as he heads to their bedroom, and this line "Dust rises in a bloom of decay" were lovely. Usually I pick out particularly lines that moved me, but to be honest this flowed so wonderfully and seamlessly that it would seem inadequate to pick out only one part.

Your writing has always been moving, but this one tugged, Kate, it really did. I'm so honoured to have had this written for me.

10/10 of course. You are wonderful.

xox Kylie

Author's Response: you are most welcome my dear ^_^ it took me a while, but i said i would write you something.
im so so so happy you liked it!! *squeee* and that my 2nd person POV worked like i hoped. hahahaa poor Ron - he is top of my Hate List as well!
'deliciously flawed' characters are my absolute favs!! who wants someone who is perfect? give me grit and grime and twisted thoughts any day! its so much fun!
im so pleased you felt the sadness and the exhaustion - thats what i wanted the reader to feel from this. i wanted them to feel as tired and hopeless as Ron and Hermione did with their existence, until, like you said, the final close was appropriate.
dust - a definite symbol. im glad you saw that too (which i knew you would ^_-)
sweetie, im so incredibly happy you liked this so much!! thank you for a lovely review!!
*tackle hugs*
Kate xoxox

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