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Review:Padfoot36 says:
She died! How very tragic, it wasn’t what I was expecting an all but I defiantly like it that way. It’s very original and tragic, but is a new twist to the whole Rose/Scorpius relationship.

Things I Liked: I love how you start off the story with discussing the ideals of love and hate, and how Scorpius knew of nothing of them yet but they turned out to mean so much to him. I like how you portray the hatred between Rose and Scorpius as well, it seems very believable. I really like the line by the way – In the end, my hatred for her grew so unbearable that I did something unforgivable; I fell in love with her. I like how you made it a gradual change for Scorpisu changing who he was, its more believable then all the novels where he simply changes one day. You explained the reasoning behind it. I liked how you brought back the meaning of love and hate, but I think you should die it back in at the end.

Things I Would Change/Don't Get: When you go into the first memory and you say - I smirked, my brown eyes sparkling – it seems to break up the hate tone that you have going. I would remove the sparkling part because it seems like something you would say when describing. I absolutely loved how they still argued and bickered but my only thing would be is to add more if it. Perhaps have that step where there bickering but inside there regretting it or it turns more into pure hate into just fun joking. Also you say there first kiss is before O.W.L.s, in what year? That’s another thing I’m a little confused about the timeline here.

Character Analysis: The little bit you portrayed of Draco I liked, but I would mention how he was a coward and had a grudge but somewhat grudging respect of some other people. He did change a little bit after the war I always though. I think you portrayed Scorpius just beautifully; you captured him just the way I always thought I saw him as. I would have liked to see Rose’s parents reaction to the relationship and a bit more characterization on Rose.

Possible Clichés: I thought it was going to be the typical Rose/Scorpius relationship but your ending made it reverse all the clichés things. (and it raised my rating on it!)

Overall Rating: 9/10

Author's Response: thanks ever so much for your review!

the brown eyes thing doesnt fit, so i will change that, thanks! it completely changes the mood of the sentence.

the timeline - the flashbacks are supposed to be in chronological order, but there's a type somewhere near the beginning that i've changed already (waiting for validation) so it will all be gravy when thats done.

i will go back and add more to draco, thanks for the advice.

thanks so much for your review! it's so hopeful :)

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