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Review:ElissandrAnne says:

When I was told about this one shot and saw the characters listed, I truly wondered what this story was about and my curiosity was immediately piqued. 'One-shot' is the perfect format for those 'missing' moments that we would have liked to see in the series, isn't it?

First off, I liked how you set this in the bathroom - or at least the part with Bill and Fleur. You could have chosen any other room, but the bathroom, like the bedroom, is a place where people can have a real heart-to-heart.

There were times when I thought that Bill was a bit too harsh - but maybe it was his disappointment speaking, and he over-reacted. It was strange to see that Fleur knew Ron so much better than "Beell". But at the same time it made her a true Weasley.

About the so-called Fleurspeak, it was a bit too 'heavy', but then I think that the way JK Rowling wrote her was too. The heavy accent tends to make her an airhead, though she is anything but an airhead. It was bad characterization by JK Rowling, who never developed her past the two dimensional character. I'm glad you gave her more depths here. Good job!

Poor Ron... *sigh* Of course, I was disappointed when he walked out on Harry and Hermione. I really thought he would came back a few hours later. But it didn't happen that way... I think you wrote his confusion and feelings well here. You made him over-react to Bill's words - and to his own actions - the way teens over-react at times.

Good job, Andy!



Author's Response: I really don't know how the bathroom setting came about. I think it was something to do with using a mirror so I could describe both characters at the same time without them having to look directly at each other. I'm not sure such a big bathroom could possibly fit into a tiny sounding place like Shell Cottage, but it worked for the fic! :P Glad you like it!

Bill was harsh. Even I thought that as I reread the piece, but like I said - I didn't want to take away of the reaction. I was angry too, so I let Bill be. You're right, I suppose it does make it a true Weasley! :D I figured sometimes it's easier for a relative outsider to understand the workings of the family. I think in recent years, Fleur has probably spent just as much time with Ron as Bill has and she' s not caught up in brotherly bias. Bill is only lashing out because he loves his brother. And you're right about the accent, but Gubby did a wonderful job of reproducing JKR's one.

You thought he'd be back in a few hours? So did I. Have I told you my reading story? I must have. I started reading it at midnight one month later and by the time Ron left my eyes were drooping, but I let myself keep reading for at least two more chapters because I was SO SURE he'd come back! So I finally fell asleep and obviusly the first thing I did the next morning was slump on an armchair and continue reading...and the silver doe chapter came and all around me my family were making breakfast...when I first suspected it was Ron, let's just say I ran out onto the Irish hillside in my skimpy pjs to get some quiet! :P LOL! That's how happy I was that he was back. I think he needed to overreact Bill's words so that he would make the choice to go back. Or as I said in some of my other responses, if this whole argument took place in his head than it was his way of understanding his emotions.

Thank you so much for stopping by! :D You rock my Ron Weasley socks, Anne! :D :D :D x x x

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