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Review:Gords7015 says:
A very nice chapter here as well! Good work conveying the scene. I think that you maybe could have had a bit of an increase in the tension with the Tonks and Draco/Snape. I think that there would be an increasing level of tension from the get go, and then something to make it break. I think Draco breaking down and Andromena comforing him would normalize the relationship. I think you do this to a certain effect, but I think you could expand it to make it seem much more tense and then normalize it. Not trying to be critical here, just trying to find a way to make a good chapter even better.

Author's Response: On the contrary, i love constructive criticism because that's how we all learn. Now, on this scene i'm going to stick to my guns but I will qualify why. My Malfoy is not like in DH, he's terrifeid out of his wits by what Voldy can do.. He turns kind of polite because he has little choice. He will be a bit more arrogant with Harry though.

I see Draco as someone very private though, when he's feeling that low, he's not tactile, or he won't show his emotions, he will later though...


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