Hello, sorry that it took so long to review, but my life is... busy, to say the least.
This is some great piece of work, really. You really did a great job characterizing the sin. You not only portrayed greed by Hermione's words of what Harry was doing that kept them apart, but you also made we see that he couldn't stand for the fact that someone didn't like him, specially if this one was Hermione. He really did everything to get what he wanted.
I don't doubt that he really came to his senses in the end, that he would give up everything to be with the only true thing around him.
You put some pretty true thing in this story: Harry's life was probably empty after the war, everything he experienced in the wizarding world had to do with Voldemort since his first year, now that Voldemort is gone, what's left for him? And also the fact that people can really drown in this world of glory and favors when they have nothing better to hold at, it's a easy path and it's really hard to get away from that and usually, when they find out where that path has taken them, they have no true friends around them anymore.
Just loved it!
Author's Response: oh please, i totally understand, and would have had you reviewed a month later, life gets in the way (in fact it's better that way, means you at least have a life, no? ;) lol)
anyway, i am so glad that you could see some truth to my logic as i know that usually people take the harry goes away to find himself route after the war (or he becomes an auror and lives happily ever after). but, for many of us, after finishing one chapter in our lives, we are often confronted by this daunting idea of what's next. while the world is so full of oppertunities that's usually the scary part, b/c how do you knwo which one si the right one for you (scary paradox lol). so harry got pulled into that lime light, and, in reality, no matter how humble or good a person may be they can fall suspect to that lime light, which is why i'm so glad that you came up with this challenge as it was such a great catalyst. when i saw it i was suddenly accosted by tons of ideas, but that one was one that really manifested-- one that i really enjoyed exploring
so thank you, and glad that you were able to enjoy reading it-- means so much since you provided me with a premise that i just adored writing