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Review:Pookha says:
Very well written. The emotions ooze from the page and coat the reader (in a good way!). This really fills in a missing bit of Snape, and the characterisations were excellent. I can see Narcissa being this snooty and having DE sympathies (although I personally believe that her DE sympathies are much less than her husband's).

I like the way that you keep us a bit distant from Snape by using Snape instead of Severus in most of it, using Severus only when it's DD's POV. This allows us to see Snapes' emotions, but helps to keep him cool and detached, adding to the IC'ness of it.

It also reinforces my own opinion of James (jerk!). Severus and Harry have more in common than they would ever believe; both could have been either Gryffindor or Slytherin.

I only have one small quibble: Snape would have known the end result of his dalliance with Narcissa and I have a hard time seeing him abrogate his duties to the Order, DD, and most importantly Lily's memory. But, I forgive small quibbles when the story is as beautifully written as this. I could learn a lot about emotional characterisation from you.

9/10.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review.

I tend to use Snape for the adult Snape, unless I'm writing from someone else's POV. I'm not sure even he thinks of himself as Severus.

As to the last comment: what I was trying to convey was that even though his brain had no intention of doing anything except having a conversation with Narcissa and, later, giving her the potion, and getting the heck out of there, his long-dormant libido had other ideas. The side effects of the powerful Unbeakable Vow had let it out of its pen, and now it had a focus and was starting the celebration. He was sick in the bathroom because he was afraid he might not resist. And, although he was well aware of the consequences, having just reviewed the memory, people are geniuses at rationalization when it comes to this particular area of life. Ultimately, Mother Nature, aided and abetted by the side effects of that powerful Unbreakable Vow, grabbed hold of this 38 year old, um, abstinent person, very forceably, and let him know that She was not interested in consequences -- he wasn't going anywhere.


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