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Review:Nymphie Lupin says:
okaaayyy. I'm sorry, but I could've SWORN I left a review yesterday when I read this. I must not have sent it in. :(

oh well then...

Basically what I said in my last review was that I loved this. You portrayed both Tonks and Remus excellently. Your characterizations of them were marvelous, so WELL DONE!!!

I couldn't really find anything for you to improve upon except the fact that your setting seemed a little underdeveloped. What I mean is, that for future stories be sure to go a little more in depth with the scenery. I don't really think that it affected this fic so much because it takes place in the hospital wing and EVERYONE and their grandmother knows what the infirmary looks like because of the books and/or movies. However, in the future you'll probably write scenes in some unfamiliar places that may not have been so elaborated on in the books and movies. From my experience, I always prefer stories that as I'm reading, I can picture everything in my mind. But as I said before seeing as this took place in the Hospital Wing, you're safe with less details. It's just a suggestion that I had to make your writing even better (if that's even possible, lol, because YOU ARE SIMPLY AMAZING)

Anyway, I love love love love love Remus and Tonks. And I love love love love loved the fact that this was believable. Some stories are so out-there, you know? Like that could never have ever happened in their relationship. But while I was reading this, I could actually see that this is probably EXACTLY what happened after everyone left the hospital wing. So nice job, dear. You're extremely talented when it comes to writing amazing fics, I can tell you that much.

This gets a 10/10, definitely. And it was such a pleasure to read such an amazing fic by such an amazing writer.

HAVE A COOKIE FOR A JOB WELL DONE!!!

*gives you a nice, yummy cookie* YUM!!! YAY!

Have a great day too!

-Shea

(oh and I should mention that I loved the title!!! It's totally them... not to mention it reminded me of the Twilight Series... *goes off daydreaming about Edward the vampire*... yeah... so GREAT TITLE!!!)

Author's Response: Ooh, that's an excellent point about the scenery. My problem with the physical descriptions is that I'm not a person who generally notices these sorts of things. I mean, if you asked me questions about certain rooms in my own house, I probably wouldn't be able to answer them correctly. But then, of course, that means that I should be working extra hard on that part of my writing, so thanks for pointing that out!

I totally know what you mean about those outlandish fics that leave you confused and wondering what the author was smoking when he/she wrote them. I'm really glad that you don't think this falls into that category. :)

Thanks for reviewing!


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